Friday, March 24, 2006

spring thaw
the dog finds a carcass
and rolls in it

2 Comments:

Blogger mattm said...

this is a good scene frank - just a thought that it's actually two haiku moments - is the rolling in it the real killer part?

Thursday, March 30, 2006 11:37:00 PM  
Blogger Frank Zappai said...

that's a good point about it being two moments.

this started out in life as a tanka that I played with while it sat in my "edit box" for a while:

spring thaw
the dog finds a carcass
and rolls in it
- new meaning for "off game"
he'll ride home in the truck bed

I was never really happy with that. though I may still rework it now with your comment in mind--thanks for that!

and re your rolling=killing comment, that smell can definitely kill.... :-)

Friday, March 31, 2006 11:48:00 AM  

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